I was thinking damn fine buck but, don't give up your day job. Who was it, I don't remember...but basically it went, "Say what you mean and stop throwing in words that detract from your story". To much descriptive narration becomes tedious and is not a smooth read. Hemmingway you're not.[8D]
I enjoyed the story very much. Antler Eater is by far one of my favorite reads. The man has knowledge and puts it to words very well. Unlike a lot of posters who just crawled out from under their rock.
I wish I could write like he does. Once again a big congrats on the fine buck and the outstanding narration.
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