A Story
09-17-2008, 05:31 PM
#31
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RE: A Story
I am sorry GMMAT, I didn't get a chance to read all the way through it before. I see what you did, and to behonest, I get where you are coming from.
Thanks for the edit and critique, it was well needed.
As to the rest of you, maybe a apology is in order?
I never meant for this to turn into a "hate mail" sort of thing. I just wanted honest opinion's from honest people, and that' s what I got.
When I wrote this, I should have looked over it more and revised it a little better myself, rather than have MS Word do it for me. I wrote it and posted it.
All of your critique's, either good or bad, is what I asked for, so I shouldn't have got so defensive about the situation. Again, I'm sorry for all the mess, and hopefully when I get done re-reading it, re-writing it and have finally come up with a killer story, you guys can tell me what you really think, honestly.
Thank You
p.s.
I also wanted to say that, what I meant by "my generation" of talking is, everybody that I know and talk to, outside of huntingnet.com, always abbreviates and tries to simplify, every sentence and word. I just thought that everyone knew that stuff, and could relate, but I guess I was wrong. Sorry for all of that too.
Thanks for the edit and critique, it was well needed.
As to the rest of you, maybe a apology is in order?
I never meant for this to turn into a "hate mail" sort of thing. I just wanted honest opinion's from honest people, and that' s what I got.
When I wrote this, I should have looked over it more and revised it a little better myself, rather than have MS Word do it for me. I wrote it and posted it.
All of your critique's, either good or bad, is what I asked for, so I shouldn't have got so defensive about the situation. Again, I'm sorry for all the mess, and hopefully when I get done re-reading it, re-writing it and have finally come up with a killer story, you guys can tell me what you really think, honestly.
Thank You
p.s.
I also wanted to say that, what I meant by "my generation" of talking is, everybody that I know and talk to, outside of huntingnet.com, always abbreviates and tries to simplify, every sentence and word. I just thought that everyone knew that stuff, and could relate, but I guess I was wrong. Sorry for all of that too.
09-17-2008, 06:21 PM
#32
Nontypical Buck
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RE: A Story
I think you guys may have gotten a bit out of hand. Constructive criticism is a good thing and can be very motivating, but to say that his story straight up sucked isn't constructive at all. Maybe he isn't the BEST writer, but his story was definitely enjoyable. Yes, it needs work. Yes, the grammar was off a bit. Yes, 7 + 7 =14 not eleven. But as a whole the story wasn't so bad.
It is one thing to give someone guidance to become better at what they choose, but dont squash someones hope. Telling him that his writing sucks can take away his desire or will to write. Why squash someones dreams? Be helpful with your criticisms, because whether you think so or not, it may hurt more than you realize.
I think he posted this story with the intent to share his passion for the outdoors that we all can agree we have. The story relates to each and everyone of us, and therefor lets not down our fellow hunter but embrace that he is writing about hunting at all. With some work, and some help, he can become a great writer.
Personally, I think your story is pretty good. There are some things that need work, but all-in-all you write very well. Keep at it, and follow your heart. Don't let others dictate what you can and cannot do.
It is one thing to give someone guidance to become better at what they choose, but dont squash someones hope. Telling him that his writing sucks can take away his desire or will to write. Why squash someones dreams? Be helpful with your criticisms, because whether you think so or not, it may hurt more than you realize.
I think he posted this story with the intent to share his passion for the outdoors that we all can agree we have. The story relates to each and everyone of us, and therefor lets not down our fellow hunter but embrace that he is writing about hunting at all. With some work, and some help, he can become a great writer.
Personally, I think your story is pretty good. There are some things that need work, but all-in-all you write very well. Keep at it, and follow your heart. Don't let others dictate what you can and cannot do.
09-17-2008, 08:35 PM
#33
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RE: A Story
ORIGINAL: fingerz42
I think you guys may have gotten a bit out of hand. Constructive criticism is a good thing and can be very motivating, but to say that his story straight up sucked isn't constructive at all. Maybe he isn't the BEST writer, but his story was definitely enjoyable. Yes, it needs work. Yes, the grammar was off a bit. Yes, 7 + 7 =14 not eleven. But as a whole the story wasn't so bad.
It is one thing to give someone guidance to become better at what they choose, but dont squash someones hope. Telling him that his writing sucks can take away his desire or will to write. Why squash someones dreams? Be helpful with your criticisms, because whether you think so or not, it may hurt more than you realize.
I think he posted this story with the intent to share his passion for the outdoors that we all can agree we have. The story relates to each and everyone of us, and therefor lets not down our fellow hunter but embrace that he is writing about hunting at all. With some work, and some help, he can become a great writer.
Personally, I think your story is pretty good. There are some things that need work, but all-in-all you write very well. Keep at it, and follow your heart. Don't let others dictate what you can and cannot do.
I think you guys may have gotten a bit out of hand. Constructive criticism is a good thing and can be very motivating, but to say that his story straight up sucked isn't constructive at all. Maybe he isn't the BEST writer, but his story was definitely enjoyable. Yes, it needs work. Yes, the grammar was off a bit. Yes, 7 + 7 =14 not eleven. But as a whole the story wasn't so bad.
It is one thing to give someone guidance to become better at what they choose, but dont squash someones hope. Telling him that his writing sucks can take away his desire or will to write. Why squash someones dreams? Be helpful with your criticisms, because whether you think so or not, it may hurt more than you realize.
I think he posted this story with the intent to share his passion for the outdoors that we all can agree we have. The story relates to each and everyone of us, and therefor lets not down our fellow hunter but embrace that he is writing about hunting at all. With some work, and some help, he can become a great writer.
Personally, I think your story is pretty good. There are some things that need work, but all-in-all you write very well. Keep at it, and follow your heart. Don't let others dictate what you can and cannot do.
09-18-2008, 04:29 AM
#34
Dominant Buck
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RE: A Story
I went through the whole thing bowtech. I, admittedly, didn't get a chance to check for my own grammar.....but I spent more time with it than I intended.
What I hope you got was an "alternative"view on how to make your story "flow", better. That's the best way I could think of to properly critique it.
I hope it helped.
What I hope you got was an "alternative"view on how to make your story "flow", better. That's the best way I could think of to properly critique it.
I hope it helped.
09-18-2008, 08:42 AM
#35
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RE: A Story
Well thank you all.......
I'm not sure if this is what I should be doing with my time, since I dont seem to be very good at it, but I love to write and I think I should just do it for fun, huh? What do ya think?
I'm not sure if this is what I should be doing with my time, since I dont seem to be very good at it, but I love to write and I think I should just do it for fun, huh? What do ya think?
09-18-2008, 09:11 AM
#36
Giant Nontypical
Join Date: May 2005
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RE: A Story
Hey btl, I make arrows. I cap and crest and fletch etc. When I started I sucked at it. The arrows were ugly, fletchings came off way to easy etc. I stuck with it and with some time and practice I do OK now. No one is perfect at much of anything when they start. Keep at it. Who knows we may just be reading you in Outdoor Life one day. And as I said in PMs, sorry for being so harsh.
09-18-2008, 09:33 AM
#37
Nontypical Buck
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RE: A Story
Best of luck in your pursuits bowtech. I can tell you, one of the hardest things to do on this here planet is conveying your thoughts and emotions via the written word. GOOD LUCK and enjoy yourself.
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