Need suggestion/critiques please

[PAstew]

We have been waiting for this prototype since March. It finally arrived! We have been going over the ad work for it. I would appreciate any critiques on the ad. Thanks in advance

[Arthur P]

Maybe inset a small close up of the engraved turkey feathers so people could see what they look like. I'd also like to see close ups of the riser and overlays too, but that many pics would probably make the layout look too junky.[&:]

[BobCo19-65]

Personally I'd like to see a profile of the bow unstrung, the feathers are unique as Art mentioned, so I'd also like to see that.

[Big Duane]

yep, I care nothing to see the back of the bow, I want to see a profile, how it looks strung/unstrung to get an idea of the limb design etc

[missedagain]

PaStew,
Very clevor!

[Alpha Capo]

i also second putting a profile pic of the bow unstrung....

dont put it on the side put it at the bottom of the page horizontally(where your company info is)

if you want to keep theindian head center itunder neath the words "Iroquois Warrior" or put it in the top left corner....just a suggestion.

get rid of the logo you put with your Company name(not saying i dont like it)if you dont have room(just use Allegheny Archers with ph# and WWW adress)

the paragraph on the bow is good and well wrote....just tinker with the layout a bit and emphasize the bow as much as you can with As many photos you can fit....after all thats what your selling.... oh and dont forget to put the length of the bow, poundage rangeavailable, maybee how close to center cut the riser is and price$$$ ....

personally pictures are what pulls me into an ad...just give me the tech specs,good pics,company info and a price idea.