I'm laid up for a few days at home, so I'll bite...
To be brutally honest, it's the type of blog site that makes people hate blog sites. I know this isn't exactly what you want to hear, but it was awful.
For starters, it's incredibly rambling, and full of grammatical and spelling errors. Some of your statements will ramble for 3-4 lines without any punctuative breaks. Then in the MX-4 "review", you misspell the word "beat". "Beet the sh*t out of them", really? In the golf balls story, "it seamed to me i was the target"... Unless you were sewn to a target, nothing "seams" to you. It SEEMS to me that you have a problem with phonetic spelling. In the "stuck in the tree" story, you also "lift a message for your buddy", maybe if you would have 'LEFT' him a message, he would have gotten it. Also in "stuck in a tree", "I saw about 6-7 nice doe’s but the where a little far out for my liking"... Try "I saw 6 or 7 nice doe's, but THEY WERE a little far out for my liking."... In "golf balls", "wising" should be "whizzing", and "minuets" should be "minutes". In "the only deer in the woods", "privet" should be spelled "private", "make more since" should be "make more SENSE", "his scheduled was kind of full" should be "schedule"...
Also in the "stuck in a tree" story, you say "like I always do every time.". Frankly, no one cares that you lowered your bow so you don't need to emphasize HOW you lower it, and "always" and "every time" are redundant. Then, in one sentence, you basically say "I pulled out my phone to call my wife to come get me and then called her and said to come get me."... Repetitive and rambling, and that sentence is PACKED with grammatical errors. Or in Golf balls, "I hid behind the tree, well, most of me hid behind the tree"... Poor word choices, it was an opportunity to be illustrative, and it just comes off as repetitive. A comma here and there would really help your blog. In "the only deer in the woods", at the beginning, the word "farm" or "farmer" appears 5 times in 3 sentences...
The stories are also awkwardly familiar and conversational. Yes, blogs should engage the reader as if they're sitting in person listening to the story, but it's not a dialog. "By the way," or "So..." etc etc don't have much place. Count how many times you used the word "so" in the "stuck in a tree" story. So I was out hunting. So it was time to leave. So I climbed back up onto the top half of my climber. So now I'm mad. "So what...?"
The entire "the only deer in the woods" story is one of those "you had to be there" stories. It sounds like it's a great story for you and your buddy, but for the rest of us, I guess I'm missing the point? Every story is a good story if it's YOURS, but that's one that I probably wouldn't have put in a blog, at least not presented in that way. It's one of the longer blogs, and it's packed with unsubstantial details. It doesn't matter that it's 50 acres, or that you called him about hunting by yourself on Friday, or that you went hunting on the spot the first time on a saturday morning, or that you saw 4 squirrels and a cat, or that the doe ran 75yrds or was scared by the farmer on the tractor... The point you apparently were trying to make was that you were spending time hunting over a patch that only had ONE deer in it, and you managed to shoot it (not hard to do over 50acres), and apparently it's a funny inside story between you and your buddy. To me, I wasn't sure where the story was going the entire time, and then I was SERIOUSLY sad I spent the time reading it once I got to the punch line. 5min of my life I'll never get back.
You also mention different characters/people, that we have no reference for, no investment in, and often can't see how they tie into the story. Again, picking on "stuck in a tree", when you talk about your wife and "katie", the only real value is that you called your wife, but she couldn't come help you. Mentioning Katie just steers the readers off course, we don't know who she is, nor how she effects the story. We don't know who ryan is, nor tyler. The bottom line is, we don't know who any of these people are, but you are singling them out in name. It takes about 15sec to read that portion, and it DOES seem like you called a lot of people, but there's no bearing for time for how long it took you to finally get ahold of "Tyler", your eventual hero. You'd be much better off saying, "Luckily, I had the forethought to pack my phone along as a lifeline and after about 45min of calling everyone I could think of from my phonebook with no luck, I finally got an answer. My buddy Tyler, who lives X miles up the road said he'd be there asap with a ladder, and to "just hang out until he arrived".
In the golf balls story, you're obviously hunting within a few hundred yards of this neighbor, but you don't know him and/or didn't let him know you were out in that area hunting? Does this guy not like you? Why else would you "be the target" for his driving range? Where is this field? Is it his property? Is it adjacent to his house? The first thing I would have done at the sight of the first golf ball, since even at that point my hunt is blown, would be to holler at the neighbor to "STOP HITTING GOLF BALLS AT ME", then dropped the stand and gone and hunted elsewhere that day. I certainly wouldn't have waited 45min in silence on a blown hunt. Maybe you had some other reason for sticking around, but personally, it just seems stupid.
Even if I could stomach all of that, then there's the reviews. From my perspective, the reviews are worthless. You're admittedly young, and you're no-name hunters, not professional hunters or guides, etc, so it doesn't mean much if you just say "this is the best product I've used". For all I know, that's the ONLY product you've used. You can get around being young and inexperienced if you at least present some data to back up your conclusions, but you don't. Saying a product is great doesn't tell your readers WHY it's great, and what specifically is great about it, or what makes it superior to another product you've tried.
You have reviews of Muzzy MX-3's and MX-4's, but you don't take the opportunity to even mention the difference in performance between the two? You don't mention ANY data, the best you put up is "they give tight groups at 30yrds", or "you can beet (sic) the sh*t out of them and they still work great". Do these broadheads group better than anything else you've tried? What do you call "a tight group"? Since these are fixed blade heads, there's the OBVIOUS question of "how well do they fly?". You could have at least made a comment that "they fly just like my field points". Do the muzzy's fly better than other brands of fixed blades? Do they fly better than mechanical broadheads? In my personal experience, muzzy's are great for flying straight, and they give you the ability to use blinds with shoot through mesh, which is something you can't say for the straighter flying mechanicals, so the muzzy's give you the best of both worlds.
You have a "product review" of a climbing stand where the only things you say are "I love this stand", and "two years later it's still as nice as the first day". So what? Maybe you've only used it twice since then? Why do you love it? Is it more comfortable than another specific stand you've used? Is it more spacious? Easier to transport, easier to hang? When you do a product review, "oh it's great, I'm 25 and this is the only product I've used, take my word for it", isn't a very convincing article.
Similarly, the fox light review compares the worst method ever (carrying a car battery) with one single modern light. The entire article is focused on your poor original set up, then about 5 lines of how you made your decision to buy one. You don't even mention price? Frankly, I don't want to read a review on a product that's still in the factory packaging. Don't post anything until you've actually used it. It's 13 lines that tell me that a flashlight is lighter than a car battery... I just did the same thing in 8 words.
My advice would be either to close the site, or spend a LOT of time reading other successful hunting sites. Maybe hire a proofreader/editor to help catch spelling and grammar errors, and then have someone that's NOT in the stories pre-read the blog to help determine if they're even worth posting. Definitely forget about writing product reviews.
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